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Sayuki Gaiden: Stories 
1st-Sep-2008 10:50 pm
The final curtain falling
Title: Stories
Rating: G
Word Count: 289
Characters: Goku, Kenren, Tenpou, Konzen
Notes: So I kinda went crazy during my enforced internet abstinence (which is, THANK GOD, completely over as far as I can tell) and typed up all the stuff from my notebooks. Going back the grand distance of last January. Uh. Yes. This was the only thing I thought was finished enough to edit like WOAH while I was typing it up to post! This one was written around... October-January time, so. Uh. HI GUYS I'M BACK YOU MAY ALL REMEMBER TO DEFRIEND THIS PLACE NOW. >_>

Ken-nii-chan tells Goku stories about the lower world sometimes - about the people and the places and the food. Sometimes, when Goku is hiding in Ten-chan's room, Ken-nii-chan comes crashing through and shouts at Ten-chan for things he did in the lower world, so he tells Goku about monsters and Ten-chan without really meaning to. (He teaches Goku new words when he does that, only when he repeats them to Konzen to ask him what they mean, Konzen washes his mouth out with soap. It doesn't taste nice.)

Ten-chan tells Goku stories about anything he asks for, and he has books full of stories that he lets Goku read whenever he wants. Sometimes, when he tells Goku a story it seems like he's really telling Ken-nii-chan or Konzen the story instead, but when that happens Konzen looks angry and Ken-nii-chan looks thoughtful and Goku's figured out that those aren't good things.

(Sometimes when Ten-chan and Ken-nii-chan come back from the lower world Goku can work out his own stories from the smell of their clothes. They usually come back smelling of fire or salt - the sea, Ten-chan says when Goku asks him, water as far as the eye can see - and blood.)

Konzen doesn't tell Goku stories. He doesn't know any, he said, and Ken-nii-chan says that's because Konzen never does anything apart from signing forms and being a grumpy bastard, and Ten-chan smiles like he knows a secret.

So Goku grabs Konzen's arm and drags him away from his desk. He tells him everything he's learnt and everything he knows, trying to fill Konzen up with stories so that when he presses his face against Konzen, he can smell more than paper and closed up rooms.
2nd-Sep-2008 09:34 am (UTC)
oh man you wrote gaiden fic

♥_♥ ♥_♥ ♥_♥


4th-Sep-2008 07:53 pm (UTC)
ILU too for being awesome and giving me scans of Gaiden. :* :* :*
2nd-Sep-2008 09:36 am (UTC)
okay, i'm gonna be Serious now. pfffff.

i love this little fic. old susan fic is old but still awesome. ;; the last line is really wow, and this line is also excellent: They usually come back smelling of fire or salt - the sea, Ten-chan says when Goku asks him, water as far as the eye can see - and blood.)

really, i love it all, though. 8D

i think you meant he's really telling, not he's really tell, though. ;D
12th-Sep-2008 09:42 am (UTC)
Serious!Stormie is also an awesome Stormie! :* :* :*

Thank you Stormie! I am really really really REALLY glad you like it! I think I may have been writing it For You. I don't know why I think that, but I'm sure I've owed you Saiyuki fic with Goku in since the beginning of time? And I'm glad you like the last line because that was a 100% last minute addition and I wasn't sure it worked. :) Thanks Stormie-lady!

I do indeed! Thanks for spotting that - I read through this about eight times and completely missed it. ;)
5th-Sep-2008 03:58 pm (UTC)
kdlkf. Fabulous. The Goku-voice here is so great, and I love how much is said without saying that much, and there's all these little bits, and the emphasis on food! <3 It fit the series really, really well.

when he repeats them to Konzen to ask him what they mean, Konzen washes his mouth out with soap.

XD Heee.

And what this bit says about the lower world and the whole -- akljsk -- the whole thing the series is about:

the sea, Ten-chan says when Goku asks him, water as far as the eye can see - and blood.)

Signing forms and being a grumpy bastard! And the last line. ♥ I love these guys so much.
12th-Sep-2008 10:33 am (UTC)
askfjhasfh Thank you Baco! I'm really really happy you liked it and you think it fits - Gaiden fic is a little bit easier to write than proper-Saiyuki fic, but it's still. Difficult? And and and. I THINK what I'm trying to say is I am relieved you think it's okay! And I'm happy you liked the last line because it was really a last-minute thing because the way I had it ending before didn't feel like enough to me, so. Happy you think it works! :D
16th-Sep-2008 10:59 am (UTC)
Lovely, sweet and full of "true." Really excellent. *hugs author*
18th-Sep-2008 10:03 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) *hugs reader*
16th-Sep-2008 12:00 pm (UTC)
OOhh nice :) Look forward to seeing what else you had stored up!
18th-Sep-2008 10:04 am (UTC)
Thank you! And I have a LOT to post so hopefully there'll be something else you'll like. :D
17th-Sep-2008 03:42 am (UTC)
So very adorable. I love the way Goku is naive, but not completely oblivious. He really can be quite observant, even if he doesn't quite understand what's going on. ^^
And I too love the last lines, they definitely work well. He's just so sweet, and determined, and...~<3
I also love the dynamics that are hinted at between the other three, just little glimpses of their characters and relationships, seen through Goku's eyes. Great fic! ^^
18th-Sep-2008 10:08 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for the lovely comment! I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the fic - and that you think the dynamics worked, I was worried I might be a little off with them. :D
17th-Sep-2008 10:46 am (UTC)
That's... So very sweet. Lovely. Absolutely lovely. *adds to memories*
18th-Sep-2008 10:06 am (UTC)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! *blushes*
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